Polished Plot
So yes, I am taking this short movie seriously. (I'm going to change layouts soon by the way. Woot for that.) But how the hell am i to pull off the end driving scene.
I figured out that this short movie will be a collection of shorter ones. And the last plot I came up with will be the last one in the short series. As of now, I've only thought of one other to include in this one. The latest I've thought of is pretty much going to use natural sounds plus a bit more silence. If there's going to be, let's say, 3 installments, I guess the other one should consist of pure silence? *consults with Dixi*
So, I'm going to start with the one we have now first sans most of the time codes of the songs and post the new one I come up with later. If you already want to read something about the new one it's partly inspired by a journal post I read on deviantArt. Click THIS for the journal post.
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Not all the kind of shots are described. So you are feel free to imagine. :D
This short music video-esque thing that I hope is heart breaking: A polished version of THe Product Of Pseudo Depression
The scene: A female is sitting on the floor at the foot of her bed, staring at a TV. The TV is playing Smurfs. She's just staring at the TV, on the verge of being on the verge of her tears.
Music: Endlessly by Muse
The entering shot is from one side of the room. You see the whole scene described above. The music enters (I figured out there's no fade or whatever) at the same time that the shot cuts to a semiclose up of her. She is, as mentioned above, on the verge of being on the verge of her tears.
Aside from her, we focus on the different things we find in her room alternately with the TV screen and the girl herself. This is a subtle manifestation of pop culture elements and all that shiznat. And it gives a more personal touch, since we get to know things about the character in such a short span of time. You know how stuff we have in our rooms tells a lot about us, in the event that we choose what to have in our rooms.
And then, the song ends.
Music: None
A semi-close up shot of her (waist up) still sitting on the floor shot from the side. So we see the TV and its blaring blue light on the left side, and te girl sitting on the right side. Right when the song ends, the camera cuts to this kind of shot and it's instant silent. All we here is a stupid commercial in the background.
Music: Apocalypse Please by Muse
And then she goes berserk. (I actually like the fact that Care Bears is still on TV but Apocalypse Please is playing in the background.) There are quick pannings in this one. Care Bears to raging girl to Care Bears to crying eyes to Care Bears to close up of tear stained cheeks to Care Bears to hands clutching something breakable to the TV with Care Bears being smashed by that something breakable (apparently, she threw the thing). That kind of thing. She goes schizo here too. She stares blankly, starts crying, stares blankly, you know the drill.
And then the music suddenly stops at 2:44 (there's a buildup in the music and it suddenly stops) wherein the camera suddenly cuts to a shot coming from the ceiling. So there's an overview of the mess. Silence. (And a few sobs.)
Fade to black.
The scene: It's inside the bar. She's sitting on one of them bar stools. Everybody's dancing, getting high and having a good time.
Music: Blackout By Muse
So the shot is a semi close up again. You can see the bar table, a few glasses, and the people in the background. The character is placed dead center on the screen. But there's space on both sides of the screen, enough to accomodate half of a person on each side.
Blackout is a slow song but the people are wild in the background. So, yeah. The song's just trying to communicate what's inside the character. So there's our main character, wasting her money on drink after drink. But she doesn't do it in a rapid succession of shots or so. She drinks in a pretty normal pace, it's like she drinks with care. But she drinks a lot in that span of 3 minutes. You see some people on her side, ordering drinks, leaving to dance, and all that.
At 3:09 of the song she starts to get up and walk outside the bar. She walks through the middle of the dance floor so she gets bumped and thrown off by wild partay people. And so when she gets out, she sits outside in the gutter and tries to sort her life then and there.
And then the music changes.
Music: Butterflies and Hurricanes
I love how the first line goes: Change / everything you are / and everything you want. And then the scene shifts at 0:49 of the song. She's already driving down the road and there are lights everywhere.
Starting 1:32 she starts resting her head on the wheel, but she still needs to drive, of course. And then it turns out she's going to some guy's apartment. The scene cuts to her climbing a flight of stairs when the song reaches 2:38. It's a fast succession of shots wherein the camera cuts from one thign to another. It's like the intro of The Missing Gun if you've watched that one: Three seconds of her walking, and then it cuts to a close up of her feet, a close up of her hands, cuts to her walking, something like that.
At 3:02 she stops in front of the guy's door and just stands there until 3:19. She's still standing there but she keeps on talking to the door. Of course, we get to hear her litany. At 4:19 the camera focuses on the doorknob turning and jiggling, somebody's about to come out.
There's a bit of laughter that can be heard from the inside of the apartment room. And then at 4:23 it cuts to a camera shot about 10 meters from the girl. It's a sideways shot again, parallel to the wall and the apartment railings, so you see her just standing there. At exactly 4:23 the apartment door opens. So from that angle, the darkness outside and the light spilling out from inside the apartment room is emphasized. And then there's a semi-focus of the guy for about 9 seconds, you can see a small party going on inside the room. And everybody inside's just laughing at each other. He looks a bit confused but then he starts to smirk. And then there's a semi-focus of the girl. Looking very blank. By this time, the song ends and then the camera cuts to a semi-focus (meaning waist-up) shot of them from the side so you see them facing each other, the guy somewhat frozen in mid-act of trying to go out the door, he's still there, standing in an awkward position with his hand on the door knob. There's 4 seconds of silence and the only one breathing heavily is the guy.
And then, after the long litany the girl made while the door was closed she opens her mouth and says just this: Fuck you.
Music: Falling Away With You - Muse, again, of course
And she walks away, and the guy stops smirking and looks even more confused. Falling Away With You stars to play, the guy slowly closes the door (he steps out) at the same time, trying to figure out what the girl just said (even though it's only 2 words hahaha). And then at o:09 the girl turns around and says something (that I kinda stole from Perks of Being A Wallflower): You know what I figured out? I can die for you. But I can never live for you.
And then the focus continues on the guy. You know, he gets confused and discreetly emo. When the song reaches 0:24 the shot is now focused on the girl. She's climbing down the stairs and leaving the apartment. And then at 1:13 the camera cuts to another shot of her driving. City lights are everywhere. And then at 1:25 the camera pans from a shot of the girl to outside the window and the rest of the remaining city lights. At 2:04 the scene cuts to the girl crying but smiling and then she starts laughing quietly. Go figure.
So, that's a whole driving thing. Feel free to imagine what sort of different shots happen. At 2:23 the shot pans towards the window again, the camera sort of "comes out of the car," the camera turns around showing the lights and cars and then the girl's car is shown moving away. 2:34 is focused on the wheels of a car that's driving by. 2:38 is a driver's POV. On one hand of the driver's a stick because he's smoking. As he takes his hand out the window (he rests his hand there with the cigarette) the camera follows it. From here, the shot turns to a woman inside a car who's talking on her cellphone, smiling. And then there's a shot of a woman driving in a car with another man. And then somebody calls her on her cellphone and she signals the guy to keep quiet. Go figure, again.
Next shot's like somebody lying down on top of a car with a camera and everything's just streaming by. At 3:10 the camera turns to the road, at the cars, and one car zooms by fast. And then a but later on it turns to a shot of the girl. Imagine whatever melodramatic as long as by 3:50 the car slows down and at 4:01 she pulls out in a parking lot between 2 other cars.
And then the shot sort of comes from the car's hood at 4:11 so that it shows a bit of her car and the car beside her on the left and then the apartments on the right. And then she walks away, of course the focus is on her. By 4:28 she's already in the distance, climbing a flight of stairs and then a push in happens (it's when for example the foreground is blurred and the background's clear, and then the background suddenly blurs and the foreground clear). So the girl becomes blurred and we finally notice the foreground and a guy shadowed inside the girl's car, watching her. Yes, it's the ex-boyfriend who.
Next one coming up.
I figured out that this short movie will be a collection of shorter ones. And the last plot I came up with will be the last one in the short series. As of now, I've only thought of one other to include in this one. The latest I've thought of is pretty much going to use natural sounds plus a bit more silence. If there's going to be, let's say, 3 installments, I guess the other one should consist of pure silence? *consults with Dixi*
So, I'm going to start with the one we have now first sans most of the time codes of the songs and post the new one I come up with later. If you already want to read something about the new one it's partly inspired by a journal post I read on deviantArt. Click THIS for the journal post.
---
Not all the kind of shots are described. So you are feel free to imagine. :D
This short music video-esque thing that I hope is heart breaking: A polished version of THe Product Of Pseudo Depression
The scene: A female is sitting on the floor at the foot of her bed, staring at a TV. The TV is playing Smurfs. She's just staring at the TV, on the verge of being on the verge of her tears.
Music: Endlessly by Muse
The entering shot is from one side of the room. You see the whole scene described above. The music enters (I figured out there's no fade or whatever) at the same time that the shot cuts to a semiclose up of her. She is, as mentioned above, on the verge of being on the verge of her tears.
Aside from her, we focus on the different things we find in her room alternately with the TV screen and the girl herself. This is a subtle manifestation of pop culture elements and all that shiznat. And it gives a more personal touch, since we get to know things about the character in such a short span of time. You know how stuff we have in our rooms tells a lot about us, in the event that we choose what to have in our rooms.
And then, the song ends.
Music: None
A semi-close up shot of her (waist up) still sitting on the floor shot from the side. So we see the TV and its blaring blue light on the left side, and te girl sitting on the right side. Right when the song ends, the camera cuts to this kind of shot and it's instant silent. All we here is a stupid commercial in the background.
Music: Apocalypse Please by Muse
And then she goes berserk. (I actually like the fact that Care Bears is still on TV but Apocalypse Please is playing in the background.) There are quick pannings in this one. Care Bears to raging girl to Care Bears to crying eyes to Care Bears to close up of tear stained cheeks to Care Bears to hands clutching something breakable to the TV with Care Bears being smashed by that something breakable (apparently, she threw the thing). That kind of thing. She goes schizo here too. She stares blankly, starts crying, stares blankly, you know the drill.
And then the music suddenly stops at 2:44 (there's a buildup in the music and it suddenly stops) wherein the camera suddenly cuts to a shot coming from the ceiling. So there's an overview of the mess. Silence. (And a few sobs.)
Fade to black.
The scene: It's inside the bar. She's sitting on one of them bar stools. Everybody's dancing, getting high and having a good time.
Music: Blackout By Muse
So the shot is a semi close up again. You can see the bar table, a few glasses, and the people in the background. The character is placed dead center on the screen. But there's space on both sides of the screen, enough to accomodate half of a person on each side.
Blackout is a slow song but the people are wild in the background. So, yeah. The song's just trying to communicate what's inside the character. So there's our main character, wasting her money on drink after drink. But she doesn't do it in a rapid succession of shots or so. She drinks in a pretty normal pace, it's like she drinks with care. But she drinks a lot in that span of 3 minutes. You see some people on her side, ordering drinks, leaving to dance, and all that.
At 3:09 of the song she starts to get up and walk outside the bar. She walks through the middle of the dance floor so she gets bumped and thrown off by wild partay people. And so when she gets out, she sits outside in the gutter and tries to sort her life then and there.
And then the music changes.
Music: Butterflies and Hurricanes
I love how the first line goes: Change / everything you are / and everything you want. And then the scene shifts at 0:49 of the song. She's already driving down the road and there are lights everywhere.
Starting 1:32 she starts resting her head on the wheel, but she still needs to drive, of course. And then it turns out she's going to some guy's apartment. The scene cuts to her climbing a flight of stairs when the song reaches 2:38. It's a fast succession of shots wherein the camera cuts from one thign to another. It's like the intro of The Missing Gun if you've watched that one: Three seconds of her walking, and then it cuts to a close up of her feet, a close up of her hands, cuts to her walking, something like that.
At 3:02 she stops in front of the guy's door and just stands there until 3:19. She's still standing there but she keeps on talking to the door. Of course, we get to hear her litany. At 4:19 the camera focuses on the doorknob turning and jiggling, somebody's about to come out.
There's a bit of laughter that can be heard from the inside of the apartment room. And then at 4:23 it cuts to a camera shot about 10 meters from the girl. It's a sideways shot again, parallel to the wall and the apartment railings, so you see her just standing there. At exactly 4:23 the apartment door opens. So from that angle, the darkness outside and the light spilling out from inside the apartment room is emphasized. And then there's a semi-focus of the guy for about 9 seconds, you can see a small party going on inside the room. And everybody inside's just laughing at each other. He looks a bit confused but then he starts to smirk. And then there's a semi-focus of the girl. Looking very blank. By this time, the song ends and then the camera cuts to a semi-focus (meaning waist-up) shot of them from the side so you see them facing each other, the guy somewhat frozen in mid-act of trying to go out the door, he's still there, standing in an awkward position with his hand on the door knob. There's 4 seconds of silence and the only one breathing heavily is the guy.
And then, after the long litany the girl made while the door was closed she opens her mouth and says just this: Fuck you.
Music: Falling Away With You - Muse, again, of course
And she walks away, and the guy stops smirking and looks even more confused. Falling Away With You stars to play, the guy slowly closes the door (he steps out) at the same time, trying to figure out what the girl just said (even though it's only 2 words hahaha). And then at o:09 the girl turns around and says something (that I kinda stole from Perks of Being A Wallflower): You know what I figured out? I can die for you. But I can never live for you.
And then the focus continues on the guy. You know, he gets confused and discreetly emo. When the song reaches 0:24 the shot is now focused on the girl. She's climbing down the stairs and leaving the apartment. And then at 1:13 the camera cuts to another shot of her driving. City lights are everywhere. And then at 1:25 the camera pans from a shot of the girl to outside the window and the rest of the remaining city lights. At 2:04 the scene cuts to the girl crying but smiling and then she starts laughing quietly. Go figure.
So, that's a whole driving thing. Feel free to imagine what sort of different shots happen. At 2:23 the shot pans towards the window again, the camera sort of "comes out of the car," the camera turns around showing the lights and cars and then the girl's car is shown moving away. 2:34 is focused on the wheels of a car that's driving by. 2:38 is a driver's POV. On one hand of the driver's a stick because he's smoking. As he takes his hand out the window (he rests his hand there with the cigarette) the camera follows it. From here, the shot turns to a woman inside a car who's talking on her cellphone, smiling. And then there's a shot of a woman driving in a car with another man. And then somebody calls her on her cellphone and she signals the guy to keep quiet. Go figure, again.
Next shot's like somebody lying down on top of a car with a camera and everything's just streaming by. At 3:10 the camera turns to the road, at the cars, and one car zooms by fast. And then a but later on it turns to a shot of the girl. Imagine whatever melodramatic as long as by 3:50 the car slows down and at 4:01 she pulls out in a parking lot between 2 other cars.
And then the shot sort of comes from the car's hood at 4:11 so that it shows a bit of her car and the car beside her on the left and then the apartments on the right. And then she walks away, of course the focus is on her. By 4:28 she's already in the distance, climbing a flight of stairs and then a push in happens (it's when for example the foreground is blurred and the background's clear, and then the background suddenly blurs and the foreground clear). So the girl becomes blurred and we finally notice the foreground and a guy shadowed inside the girl's car, watching her. Yes, it's the ex-boyfriend who.
Next one coming up.
posted by Byeong | 6:27:00 PM
7 Comments:
oin the 2005 Palanca Awards!
Posted 10:07pm (Mla time) April 12, 2005
Inquirer News Service
Editor's Note: Published on page G1 of the April 13, 2005 issue of the Philippine Daily Inquirer
CALLING all writers (aspiring or otherwise), bloggers and everyone else who has picked up a pen in their life. If you're 18 years old and below with dreams of grandeur, this just might be your chance to gloat away. The highly acclaimed Carlos Palanca Awards for Literature is looking for entries for their Kabataan Essay category.
The Kabataan Essay is an informal piece, so the more personal, the better. This year's theme is "The Greatest Value my Father/Mother Taught Me" for the English division, and "Ang Pinakamahalagang Aral na itinuro ng Aking Ama/Ina" for the Filipino division. Your piece, which should carry an original title, must be at least four typewritten pages long, and not more than five pages.
All entries should be in by April 30. Log on to www.viloria.com/cpma-2005-rules.doc, for the complete list of rules and mechanics (there are a lot, so better pay close attention).
hehe join.. you might just win...
I'll do an advanced critique later, it's getting late, dammit.
Er, Jeon Ji Hyun is my favorite actress nowadays, and maybe for the rest of my life (hopefully hehe). She starred in My Sassy Girl, which either changed me completely or brought out something in me i never thought I had (I don't know which one hehe). Now I'm a complete kimchi-devouring Asian movie addict. You go watch it if you haven't yet, and I'll go watch Lost in Translation, coz I haven't yet.
Lol.
This one's better by a mile, actually. But then I think you should review it a few more times then add all the details. For me I prefer the slowness of the overall plot yet the quickness of every sequence, which leads to very good character development. I think that's reflected in your case.
I'm waiting for the next ones.. gotta go watch American Idol hahahahaha.
Patag: Thanks for the ingo. Not sure if I'm joining, maybe when I get inspiration for the title. :D
JM: Cool, thanks. It's just the same as the other only with less side comments and less cluttered.
btw, it's 4-5 pages for that essay or 10-25 pages on any topic you want...
the 10-25 thing will give you at most 7000 pesos
the 4-5 page thing will only give you 3000 haha...
i cant write that long but you sure have a talent for that...
Oh man, even I can't write that long pag TNR 12 hahaha.
I saw that Inq issue..and there was a girl that won and she wrote "Plea to my Peers". I didn't think she should have won. Besides, she was entirely judgemental on her topic about the youth and education. She said that most young people these days get a good education and then use it to get out of the country and get rich.
Mere rhetoric to me. There were a lot of other words and it was like, crap? If this wins first prize, what happens when Roana, or Dixi or Juanchi joins? haha...
Meh, I'm not joining that. Palanca Award's not for me. I'm not much of a writer to join it haha. I'm just a person with ideas who happens to know how to write. ;)
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